Detailed  Peer  Review  about  the  final  essay   Staple  a  piece  of  notebook  paper  (with  your  name  on  it)  to  the  back  of  your  essay.  Pass  your  paper  to  the  person  at  your   right.  When  you  have  a  paper  that  belongs  to  your  neighbor,  write  “1.”  and  write  your  name.  Then,  address  the   questions  that  correspond  with  that  number  on  this  page.  Be  sure  to  write  in  complete  sentences  so  the  writer   understands  what  you  are  discussing.  You  may  also  make  marks  on  the  paper  itself.  When  you  complete  that  number,   pass  it  to  the  next  person  and  do  number  2  on  the  new  paper  you  get…and  so  on.  By  the  time  you  complete  this  peer   review,  you  should  get  back  detailed  comments  about  six  different  parts  of  your  paper  from  six  different  commenters  in   the  class.     1. Discuss  changes  and  suggestions  you  can  recommend  in  detail  in  the  introduction  and  the  hook  of  this  paper.   Identify  and  respond  to  the  thesis  statement.  Check  how  the  introduction  flows  from  one  thought  to  another.   Did  the  writer  talk  about  the  hook  enough  before  moving  on  to  the  background  info?  And  then  between  the   background  and  the  thesis?    Does  the  conclusion  refer  back  to  the  thesis  and  frame  the  essay  as  we  discussed?   2. Give  the  writer  suggestions  to  enhance  the  introductions  to  the  quoted  material.  Can  you  tell  who  is  saying  the   words  and  why  we  should  listen  to  him  or  her?  Offer  tips  to  help  the  writer  sound  more  scholarly.   3. Give  the  writer  suggestions  to  enhance  the  responses  to  quoted  material.  Can  you  tell  why  this  quote  is   important?  Does  the  writer  show  what  each  quote  means  and  show  how  each  quote  is  connected  to  the  thesis?   Remember  to  respond  to  the  sentences  at  the  end  of  each  paragraph.  Do  they  answer  the  “so  what?”  question?   4. Give  the  writer  tips  for  transition  sentences  BETWEEN  source  material.  Remember  that  the  essay  should  not   sound  like  a  list  of  source  material  strung  together  to  look  like  an  essay.  The  bulk  of  the  paper  should  be  the   writer’s  own  words  arguing  a  point.  Give  suggestions  to  enhance  the  flow  from  paragraph  to  paragraph  and   source  to  source.   5. Help  the  writer  use  more  and  better  transition  words.  Here  is  a  list  of  words  you  could  suggest  for  them.     For continuing a thought:   consequently clearly, then furthermore additionally and in addition moreover because besides that in the same way following this further also pursuing this further in the light of the... it is easy to see that       To restate a point:   in other words point in fact specifically  

To change the line of reasoning (contrast):   however on the other hand but yet nevertheless on the contrary       For the final points of a paragraph or essay:   finally lastly         To signal conclusion:   therefore this hence in final analysis in conclusion in final consideration indeed  

For opening a paragraph:   admittedly assuredly certainly granted no doubt nobody denies obviously of course to be sure true undoubtedly unquestionably generally speaking in general at this level in this situation                

  6. Respond  to  the  author’s  counterargument  and  rebuttal.  Does  this  section  show  that  the  author  has  weighed  all   the  options  and  made  a  final  proposal  based  on  much  knowledge?  Does  this  section  use  enough  source  material   and  quotes  to  prove  each  point?  Make  suggestions  to  help  the  writer  enhance  the  counter  argument  or  to  build   one  if  you  can’t  find  one.